Tuesday, November 16, 2010

Wrote some tonight

So, I started writing my story...but I started from the climax. I've had this part in my head for quite some time and I just needed to get it out. I'm hoping that having this point will allow me to start building the story to this point and then finally finish it all together. I'd love some feedback:


“You left me for her. You chose her over me. How am I supposed to trust you after that?”
“She. Was. Pregnant. What did you want me to do? Abandon her? You know I couldn’t do that.”
“I WAS TOO!” she yelled and watched his jaw drop. Lexi felt the tears start welling up, so she turned and fled. Logan couldn’t do anything except watch her leave, not even close the door she left wide open. His mind was reeling, if she was pregnant where was the baby? Why didn’t she tell him? Did she hate him that much? Logan knew that the more time he had to think the more questions he would come up with, but at the same time he needed to process everything.
***
Lexi knocked on Julie’s door, not knowing where else to go. “You told him, didn’t you?” Julie asked as soon as she saw Lexi’s face. Lexi just nodded and sniffed. “How did he take it?”
“I didn’t get a chance to tell him everything. We were fighting and I asked him how I was supposed to trust him after he left me, and when he asked what I wanted him to do because she was pregnant I blurted out that I was too.”
“Wow.”
“Yeah, then I just ran out crying. I probably shouldn’t have driven but I had to get out of there and I didn’t know where else to go. I mourn our loss every day.” Julie just wrapped her arms around Lexi and let her talk. “I probably could’ve found a better way to tell him, but it just came out. I was meaning to tell him, but not like this. Maybe I should go apologize.”
“Slow down sweetie. You’re not thinking straight right now and I’m sure Logan needs some time to process what you’ve told him. It’s a lot for one person to take in, especially when it was dropped out of the blue.”

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